Some wonderful chaps have already been kind enough to offer some feedback on instagram ( http://instagram.com/setsolid ) but as long as it's constructive, the more the merrier. I feel this is close to being a nice piece, but I just cant seem to push it over the final few bumps.
The story on this spread is about the romantic love letter written by Johnny Cash to June Carter Cash. So I am illustrating an ampersand (to represent the relationship) and June Carter.
I know that the right hand lock needs to rotate slightly to feel as if it's part of the left hand one, that was a silly mistake. But it's still missing that something… Maybe I'll wake up in the morning and just do it. But in case I don't, throw in your two pennies worth.
I love it as is! If anything it perhaps might look a little more flattering (she looks bottom heavy/pear shaped) if it was stretched out taller, so it looks less like you're viewing it on a perspective of it being on an angle, and instead view it from directly above (hard to explain!).
I like No. 2 although I do like the shine texture from No. 1.
Only thing I'd suggest is the white strands that run down the longest part of the ampersand.
Where the separate in the middle they seem a little awkward. Not flowing in the same direction if you get my drift.
If you were to draw it in a full, flowing path (maybe using an AI brush) and then use the cut tool to take a piece out then it would have that organic flow to it.